Keep Out
KEEP OUTLike all caves, dark and still. The stalagmitesallure courageous souls who'll bear the cold; a warning breath that whisks out candle lightsis nothing to a visitor with boldintentions....
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Hi Stephen -I think this builds the suspense well as far as the boiling room, then loses the place a bit. I'm not sure what to take from the last sentence. Maybe the abyss needs some explanation? - Dave
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Thanks Dave. Interesting suggestion that will take me some time to think about. For now, I've changed "drag off" to "drag out" (hoping it's clearer that the abyss is the cave), and left the entire...
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Hey, Stephen.A few thoughtsLike all caves, dark and still. It doesn't feel like this sentence ever gets completed... I wanted to tack the stalagmites part onto it.The stalagmitesallure courageous...
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